As darkness threatens to engulf all life, the universe cries out for a champion with a pure heart. But they'll have to settle for schoolgirl June Summer. With the help of her friends and her mentor, a winged bunny, June will battle monsters, struggle to maintain a normal school life, and occasionally watch television. Hey, even heroines need a little downtime. -A Magical Girl Parody. Updates Wednesdays!
December 21st, 2011, 2:00 pm
Reply melaredblu, December 20th, 2011, 9:05 pm
I bet you thought the Grim Reaper behind June’s mom three pages ago was just a special effect. You thought wrong.
Reply Advertisement, April 23rd, 2017, 12:30 am
what a creepy guest they have over...what does he eat for dinner? souls with a side of death? haha
more constructive criticism. I can start doing criticism sandwiches if you like. It's mostly fine again, but the "meanwhile, downstairs in the same building..." should definitely just be "meanwhile..."
Reply melaredblu, April 18th, 2012, 9:37 pm
@Guest: Thank you for your advice! I worry so much about my art that it never crossed my mind that the dialogue might be stilted. This is why I need criticism; people like you can point out things that need work that I wouldn't notice otherwise.